Web Design Forums

Pugsley · 06-06-2008, 08:12

OK, what you guys think of this. I hate the size of it but thats what the client wants.
And yes that is me, with the big lugs and a robot.

Coops · 06-06-2008, 08:20

Needs proof reading - there are a few grammatical errors...

Edit: fix the text alignment on the cover - it's all over the place (use all left aligned).

Don't justify the copy on the quotes - it's not nice.

Rik · 06-06-2008, 08:23

fix the text alignment on the cover - it's all over the place (use all left aligned).

Don't justify the copy on the quotes - it's not nice.

Coops · 06-06-2008, 08:24

See what you did there...

Coops · 06-06-2008, 08:25

Kyla Andrews looks alright...

Rik · 06-06-2008, 08:29

the mind quickly wonders from the job.

Pugsley · 06-06-2008, 08:32

thanks guys. Yeah i seem to be obsessed with everything having clean boxes round it. changed now though.

Coops you wouldn't fancy pointing out grammar errors for me. I didn't write the copy, I didn't even write my quote which i find quite funny.

Anyway does this look better now.

Rik · 06-06-2008, 08:33

still needs the line on the cover sorted.

the chap with the bins quote.. last line.. you have the paragraph settings going funky on the leading.

also sort the orphaned last word.

on your quote, you have an 'I' hanging at the end of a line.. would shuggle that para to sort that.

i say lose the double spaces after full stops.

Coops · 06-06-2008, 08:39

Quotes look better but you still need to get rid of all the right alignment (front cover and address).

There are a few errors:

'I would like to information on leaving a gift in my will' doesn't make sense, for starters.

Also, 'Your support...' line at top - 'students' needs an apostrophe (after the 's' as it's plural possessive).

'No donation is too small'.

Double space between 'The' and 'Robert Gordon...'.

Hanging last word (pursue) on Michael's quote.

Coops · 06-06-2008, 08:40

Uncle Coops and Uncle Gooder are here to help, young man...

Rik · 06-06-2008, 08:42

left align the two lines starting 'Your support will enhance..' and 'The Friends of Gay’s Fund will allow..'

sunny.

Rik · 06-06-2008, 08:47

Kyla Andrews has her " too high.

keep your mind on the job now. stop zooming in when nobody is looking.

Coops · 06-06-2008, 08:48

Yep - what ^ he said.

Also, lose the keylines on the white boxes - doesn't need 'em.

Pugsley · 06-06-2008, 08:48

Quote:

Originally Posted by Coops

Uncle Coops and Uncle Gooder are here to help, young man...

Cheers guys. You should just hire me and you can sit and teach me the ways.

Right, round three.

Anxious · 06-06-2008, 08:48

You two remind me of this:

Rik · 06-06-2008, 08:50

it's not been the same since coops needed the stick.

Pugsley · 06-06-2008, 08:52

round three was over before i even posted, good work.

Anxious · 06-06-2008, 08:54

Should you maybe have a '?' after 'Are you a gray's graduate'?

Pugsley · 06-06-2008, 08:55

balls.

Pugsley · 06-06-2008, 08:56

ok cahnged that but can't be arsed uploading another pdf. considered it changed when you look at it.

06-06-2008, 08:32	#7 (permalink)
Pugsley Life in Process Join Date: May 2007 Location: Aberdeen, Scotland Status: Skint but employed Posts: 4,749	thanks guys. Yeah i seem to be obsessed with everything having clean boxes round it. changed now though. Coops you wouldn't fancy pointing out grammar errors for me. I didn't write the copy, I didn't even write my quote which i find quite funny. Anyway does this look better now. __________________ If your colours are starting to run, let them all run, run away from you. Flux - Bloc Party Designer LinkedIn \| Twitter Last edited by Pugsley : 06-06-2008 at 09:33.

06-06-2008, 08:52	#17 (permalink)
Pugsley Life in Process Join Date: May 2007 Location: Aberdeen, Scotland Status: Skint but employed Posts: 4,749	round three was over before i even posted, good work. __________________ If your colours are starting to run, let them all run, run away from you. Flux - Bloc Party Designer LinkedIn \| Twitter Last edited by Pugsley : 06-06-2008 at 09:34.

06-06-2008, 08:55	#19 (permalink)
Pugsley Life in Process Join Date: May 2007 Location: Aberdeen, Scotland Status: Skint but employed Posts: 4,749	balls. __________________ If your colours are starting to run, let them all run, run away from you. Flux - Bloc Party Designer LinkedIn \| Twitter

06-06-2008, 08:56	#20 (permalink)
Pugsley Life in Process Join Date: May 2007 Location: Aberdeen, Scotland Status: Skint but employed Posts: 4,749	ok cahnged that but can't be arsed uploading another pdf. considered it changed when you look at it. __________________ If your colours are starting to run, let them all run, run away from you. Flux - Bloc Party Designer LinkedIn \| Twitter

Thread Tools	Search this Thread
Show Printable Version Email this Page	Search this Thread: Advanced Search

06-06-2008, 08:20	#2 (permalink)
Coops Pops. Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 5,250	Needs proof reading - there are a few grammatical errors... Edit: fix the text alignment on the cover - it's all over the place (use all left aligned). Don't justify the copy on the quotes - it's not nice.

06-06-2008, 08:23	#3 (permalink)
Rik Join Date: May 2007 Location: Huntly Gardens Posts: 8,619	fix the text alignment on the cover - it's all over the place (use all left aligned). Don't justify the copy on the quotes - it's not nice.

06-06-2008, 08:24	#4 (permalink)
Coops Pops. Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 5,250	See what you did there...

06-06-2008, 08:25	#5 (permalink)
Coops Pops. Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 5,250	Kyla Andrews looks alright...

06-06-2008, 08:29	#6 (permalink)
Rik Join Date: May 2007 Location: Huntly Gardens Posts: 8,619	the mind quickly wonders from the job.

06-06-2008, 08:33	#8 (permalink)
Rik Join Date: May 2007 Location: Huntly Gardens Posts: 8,619	still needs the line on the cover sorted. the chap with the bins quote.. last line.. you have the paragraph settings going funky on the leading. also sort the orphaned last word. on your quote, you have an 'I' hanging at the end of a line.. would shuggle that para to sort that. i say lose the double spaces after full stops.

06-06-2008, 08:39	#9 (permalink)
Coops Pops. Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 5,250	Quotes look better but you still need to get rid of all the right alignment (front cover and address). There are a few errors: 'I would like to information on leaving a gift in my will' doesn't make sense, for starters. Also, 'Your support...' line at top - 'students' needs an apostrophe (after the 's' as it's plural possessive). 'No donation is too small'. Double space between 'The' and 'Robert Gordon...'. Hanging last word (pursue) on Michael's quote.

06-06-2008, 08:40	#10 (permalink)
Coops Pops. Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 5,250	Uncle Coops and Uncle Gooder are here to help, young man...

06-06-2008, 08:42	#11 (permalink)
Rik Join Date: May 2007 Location: Huntly Gardens Posts: 8,619	left align the two lines starting 'Your support will enhance..' and 'The Friends of Gay’s Fund will allow..' sunny.

06-06-2008, 08:47	#12 (permalink)
Rik Join Date: May 2007 Location: Huntly Gardens Posts: 8,619	Kyla Andrews has her " too high. keep your mind on the job now. stop zooming in when nobody is looking.

06-06-2008, 08:48	#13 (permalink)
Coops Pops. Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 5,250	Yep - what ^ he said. Also, lose the keylines on the white boxes - doesn't need 'em.

06-06-2008, 08:48	#15 (permalink)
Anxious Monkey Tennis Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Scotland Posts: 4,778	You two remind me of this:

06-06-2008, 08:50	#16 (permalink)
Rik Join Date: May 2007 Location: Huntly Gardens Posts: 8,619	it's not been the same since coops needed the stick.

06-06-2008, 08:54	#18 (permalink)
Anxious Monkey Tennis Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Scotland Posts: 4,778	Should you maybe have a '?' after 'Are you a gray's graduate'?

Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)