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Old 06-06-2008, 08:12   #1 (permalink)
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OK, what you guys think of this. I hate the size of it but thats what the client wants.
And yes that is me, with the big lugs and a robot.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:20   #2 (permalink)
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Needs proof reading - there are a few grammatical errors...

Edit: fix the text alignment on the cover - it's all over the place (use all left aligned).

Don't justify the copy on the quotes - it's not nice.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:23   #3 (permalink)
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fix the text alignment on the cover - it's all over the place (use all left aligned).

Don't justify the copy on the quotes - it's not nice.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:24   #4 (permalink)
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See what you did there...
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:25   #5 (permalink)
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Kyla Andrews looks alright...
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:29   #6 (permalink)
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the mind quickly wonders from the job.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:32   #7 (permalink)
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thanks guys. Yeah i seem to be obsessed with everything having clean boxes round it. changed now though.

Coops you wouldn't fancy pointing out grammar errors for me. I didn't write the copy, I didn't even write my quote which i find quite funny.

Anyway does this look better now.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:33   #8 (permalink)
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still needs the line on the cover sorted.

the chap with the bins quote.. last line.. you have the paragraph settings going funky on the leading.

also sort the orphaned last word.

on your quote, you have an 'I' hanging at the end of a line.. would shuggle that para to sort that.

i say lose the double spaces after full stops.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:39   #9 (permalink)
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Quotes look better but you still need to get rid of all the right alignment (front cover and address).

There are a few errors:

'I would like to information on leaving a gift in my will' doesn't make sense, for starters.

Also, 'Your support...' line at top - 'students' needs an apostrophe (after the 's' as it's plural possessive).

'No donation is too small'.

Double space between 'The' and 'Robert Gordon...'.

Hanging last word (pursue) on Michael's quote.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:40   #10 (permalink)
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Uncle Coops and Uncle Gooder are here to help, young man...
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:42   #11 (permalink)
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left align the two lines starting 'Your support will enhance..' and 'The Friends of Gay’s Fund will allow..'

sunny.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:47   #12 (permalink)
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Kyla Andrews has her " too high.

keep your mind on the job now. stop zooming in when nobody is looking.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:48   #13 (permalink)
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Yep - what ^ he said.

Also, lose the keylines on the white boxes - doesn't need 'em.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:48   #14 (permalink)
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Cheers guys. You should just hire me and you can sit and teach me the ways.

Right, round three.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:48   #15 (permalink)
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You two remind me of this:

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Old 06-06-2008, 08:50   #16 (permalink)
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it's not been the same since coops needed the stick.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:52   #17 (permalink)
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round three was over before i even posted, good work.
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:54   #18 (permalink)
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Should you maybe have a '?' after 'Are you a gray's graduate'?
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Old 06-06-2008, 08:56   #20 (permalink)
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ok cahnged that but can't be arsed uploading another pdf. considered it changed when you look at it.
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