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Danyo · 23-09-2007, 20:45

It needs to be done by tomorrow afternoon. Can you give me any feedback?

RaelRode · 23-09-2007, 22:17

How about a phone number??

Scott · 23-09-2007, 22:52

I don't like it, the typography (really bad), the contrasting images (bitmaps / vectors) It's not working for me.

Childsplay - could do a lot with that than what you currently have.

Danyo · 24-09-2007, 03:47

I'll sort out the typography and I will add the phone number today. Where do you think it should go?

steveb · 24-09-2007, 04:27

Do you really need three different typefaces? Set the "copy" in Avant Garde or Futura and it won't look so anti-undisorganised. And it might look better in white, not black. Try it!
Put the phone number in the sentence itself "give us a call on 123-4567 and we'll make..."

Accurate · 24-09-2007, 05:01

I agree the black doesn't sit right on the blue background. Try darkening that blue and changing the text to white. Or lightening the blue and keeping the text black.

Danyo · 24-09-2007, 05:12

Thanks guys, making the changes now...

The overall design is okay though, no? He only supplied me with one image.

Do Gooder · 24-09-2007, 05:28

as others have said. the type is laking. spend a bit of time reseting it.

- turn off the paragraph hyphenation. (see: furn-
iture)

- sort the "quote" so the " is facing the right direction. (usually by turning on smart quotes)

Do Gooder · 24-09-2007, 05:31

other than the type it is OK for what it is. The picture (as ever) would be 100% better if it was professionally taken.

Do Gooder · 24-09-2007, 05:33

Oh. shouldn't childsplay be the heading? If 'the finished article' is the company putting together the event the norm might be to have their name small in the bottom right.

Do Gooder · 24-09-2007, 05:36

post post post. i can't get enough of posting today.

on my screen there's very little difference between the green of the plant illys and the grass background. perhaps pick out the illys in a slightly lighter shade.

Danyo · 24-09-2007, 06:27

Thanks mate, I took all your feedback into account and it looks MUCH better.

steveb · 24-09-2007, 06:43

So please show us!

Danyo · 24-09-2007, 06:56

Danyo · 24-09-2007, 07:01

I need to find a better ''kiddy'' font for childsplay, anyone know some?

Do Gooder · 24-09-2007, 07:09

dafont will have something

Scott · 24-09-2007, 07:39

SimplytheBest Fonts kids fonts

Fancy > Cartoon fonts | dafont.com

Looks better than the original yeah, type still could do with a few little things. Try opening it all up (the tracking).

The 'of our world' bit and the paragraph beneath is annoying me. Try having 'a colourful mini blah blah' below the welcome text.

Then rearrange 'childsplay' and the 'the finished article' text.

cowandmonkey · 27-09-2007, 08:39

make that flat blue a grad - change the type

emil · 27-09-2007, 10:09

Grass is awful. Grab a high res jpeg from istock and work on that, mouse-brush drawn grass never looks good.

There is no hierarchy on that text. I have no idea what it is about, nothing grabs my attention. Why three fonts?

Try Bello or Sauna for fonts from Underware. Or Cooper Black.

It's dull and unfriendly overall though, and I assume you were after the opposite effect. Sorry.

emil · 27-09-2007, 10:09

Oh fuck, and here's me replying too late.

23-09-2007, 20:45	#1 (permalink)
Danyo Graphic Designer Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Spain Posts: 129	How is this flyer? It needs to be done by tomorrow afternoon. Can you give me any feedback?

23-09-2007, 22:17	#2 (permalink)
RaelRode Designers are strange :) Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Shrewsbury, UK Posts: 1,730	How about a phone number?? __________________ If it works, it's valid.

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Scott sanddancer Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: South Shields Posts: 2,924	I don't like it, the typography (really bad), the contrasting images (bitmaps / vectors) It's not working for me. Childsplay - could do a lot with that than what you currently have. __________________ flick me

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steveb 389 ppm and rising Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Järvenpää, Finland Posts: 4,947	Do you really need three different typefaces? Set the "copy" in Avant Garde or Futura and it won't look so anti-undisorganised. And it might look better in white, not black. Try it! Put the phone number in the sentence itself "give us a call on 123-4567 and we'll make..." __________________ My free fonts www.utfi.net

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Accurate Accurate Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: UK Posts: 1,217	I agree the black doesn't sit right on the blue background. Try darkening that blue and changing the text to white. Or lightening the blue and keeping the text black. __________________ decent web hosting - www.balue.com

24-09-2007, 03:47	#4 (permalink)
Danyo Graphic Designer Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Spain Posts: 129	I'll sort out the typography and I will add the phone number today. Where do you think it should go?

24-09-2007, 05:12	#7 (permalink)
Danyo Graphic Designer Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Spain Posts: 129	Thanks guys, making the changes now... The overall design is okay though, no? He only supplied me with one image.

24-09-2007, 05:28	#8 (permalink)
Do Gooder Join Date: May 2007 Posts: 5,493	as others have said. the type is laking. spend a bit of time reseting it. - turn off the paragraph hyphenation. (see: furn- iture) - sort the "quote" so the " is facing the right direction. (usually by turning on smart quotes)

24-09-2007, 05:31	#9 (permalink)
Do Gooder Join Date: May 2007 Posts: 5,493	other than the type it is OK for what it is. The picture (as ever) would be 100% better if it was professionally taken.

24-09-2007, 05:33	#10 (permalink)
Do Gooder Join Date: May 2007 Posts: 5,493	Oh. shouldn't childsplay be the heading? If 'the finished article' is the company putting together the event the norm might be to have their name small in the bottom right.

24-09-2007, 05:36	#11 (permalink)
Do Gooder Join Date: May 2007 Posts: 5,493	post post post. i can't get enough of posting today. on my screen there's very little difference between the green of the plant illys and the grass background. perhaps pick out the illys in a slightly lighter shade.

24-09-2007, 06:27	#12 (permalink)
Danyo Graphic Designer Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Spain Posts: 129	Thanks mate, I took all your feedback into account and it looks MUCH better.

24-09-2007, 06:43	#13 (permalink)
steveb 389 ppm and rising Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Järvenpää, Finland Posts: 4,947	So please show us! __________________ My free fonts www.utfi.net

24-09-2007, 06:56	#14 (permalink)
Danyo Graphic Designer Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Spain Posts: 129

24-09-2007, 07:01	#15 (permalink)
Danyo Graphic Designer Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Spain Posts: 129	I need to find a better ''kiddy'' font for childsplay, anyone know some?

24-09-2007, 07:09	#16 (permalink)
Do Gooder Join Date: May 2007 Posts: 5,493	dafont will have something

24-09-2007, 07:39	#17 (permalink)
Scott sanddancer Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: South Shields Posts: 2,924	SimplytheBest Fonts kids fonts Fancy > Cartoon fonts \| dafont.com Looks better than the original yeah, type still could do with a few little things. Try opening it all up (the tracking). The 'of our world' bit and the paragraph beneath is annoying me. Try having 'a colourful mini blah blah' below the welcome text. Then rearrange 'childsplay' and the 'the finished article' text. __________________ flick me

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cowandmonkey Registered User Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 24	make that flat blue a grad - change the type

27-09-2007, 10:09	#19 (permalink)
emil dt immigrant Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Bucharest - Romania Posts: 7,012	Grass is awful. Grab a high res jpeg from istock and work on that, mouse-brush drawn grass never looks good. There is no hierarchy on that text. I have no idea what it is about, nothing grabs my attention. Why three fonts? Try Bello or Sauna for fonts from Underware. Or Cooper Black. It's dull and unfriendly overall though, and I assume you were after the opposite effect. Sorry. __________________ Tourism Q X R

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emil dt immigrant Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Bucharest - Romania Posts: 7,012	Oh fuck, and here's me replying too late. __________________ Tourism Q X R

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